Dead Calm – DivX Version (Normal Quality), DVD (Good Quality), PDA Version
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IMDB rating: 6.90 Plot: A married couple sail the Pacific Ocean to forget a tragic accident. After a month at sea, they sight a mysterious yacht and are boarded by its lone surviving crew member. When the husband discovers the yacht’s terrible secret, the crewman goes wild, kidnapping his wife and taking his ship. Terror on the high seas is center stage as the husband fights to keep the mystery yacht afloat and his wife battles the psychotic who’s assumed control of their ship. |
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Actors: Zane Billy,Neill Sam,Mullinar Rod,Tilden Joshua,Shevtsov George,Long Michael,Thriller,Horror,
what do u think of my BOOK SO FAR? PLZ BE HONEST!?!?!?!?!?
kk 1st u should read whats on here:
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index; _ylt=AnQU82yMAE2p2sJgW6fLXDjsy6IX;_ylv=3 ?qid=20091109164552AA41TvN
then whats here:
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index; _ylt=AstlgIXad2RqzjBttkeTD1jsy6IX;_ylv=3 ?qid=20091110153452AAXArKn
kk now heres what else i have so far:
It was 5pm when i got home. Mom told me supper would be done in about an hour. We were having home-made pizza. I decided to tell them about "camp" during supper.
I spent he next hour deciding how to bring it up and how to get them to let me go. Surf Camp, yeah right. I’d never brought surfing up. So now how was I supposed to explain to my parents why i suddenly wanted to spend my summer learning how surf? They’d think i was going through some early life crisis or something. Great, now I wouldn’t be the only one thinking I was losing it.
"Nikky? time to eat," Dad called from the kitchen.
Okay deep breaths. I can do this. Just bring it up and… and what?
"Are you coming?" Mom called impatiently.
Ugh.Why couldn’t they be more patient? As I walked into the kitchen, the warm scent of peperoni helped me calm down. I could do this no biggie, yeah right.
I sat down and dug in to my food. The table was silent. I hated silence, especially when I was trying to stay calm.
I couldn’t think of a way to bring up "surf camp". I looked up at the ceiling as if would tell me how to at least start some kind of conversation. "I want to go to surf camp for the summer," the words just flew out of my mouth. Crap, that’s so not how I wanted that to go.
Mary-Anne just about chocked on her pizza, "You? Surf? Ha right."
"I’m serious."
Mom looked at me in bewilderment, "But… Why?"
Why did she have to ask that? How the h*ll should I know why I wanted to spend the summer learning to surf. "Um… well, because I thought to myself, ‘Nikky, do you really want to spend your summer doing nothing? No, you need to do something this summer. Live a little, so… surf camp seemed like a good idea," Ha they were more likely to believe the truth about my superpowers or whatever they were.
Everyone at the table knew that was a load of bologna, but for some reason Mom and Dad agreed to it.
Mary-Anne, however, was determined to find out what was really up. Ha, she wouldn’t believe me if I told her.
There they were Again. Those cold, hungry eyes. This time there was an evil laugh, that sent shivers up my spine, to go with it. "So the little wanna-be heroes found you, huh? And now you know what your powers are. Then, you’ll beat us and live happily ever after, bla,bla,bla," he rolled his eyes, "Well, that’s what they thought, too. Yeah, not so much," suddenly the eyes were replaced with hundreds of dead bodies. They had all been tortured to death. Somehow, I knew that they all had powers like me. They didn’t stayed dead. Then I was forced to watch them all be gruesomely tortured to death, one-by-one. Ifelt their pain each time if it wasn’t a dream I would have passed out but still the pain was real. Then I saw them when they were brought back to life and felt what they felt. They were evil, they craved the torture that had killed them. They thrived on seeing others in pain. The evil laugh came again. He was enjoying my pain.
I like it. Very descriptive, I will admit that I only read the part that was there because I was in a rush. But you’re very talented. I love writing too! Is this a writing assignment or just something you do for fun. You really have amazing potential and if you’re not already doing this you should look into it.
Life is good | Nov 18, 2009
Not bad, really. Of course, I’m not getting the story yet. But the writing is OK.
You need to watch your punctuation, etc. Each of the dialogue lines need to be set off from the paragraphs. Example:
There they were Again. Those cold, hungry eyes. This time there was an evil laugh, that sent shivers up my spine, to go with it.
"So the little wanna-be heroes found you, huh? And now you know what your powers are. Then, you’ll beat us and live happily ever after, bla,bla,bla," he rolled his eyes, "Well, that’s what they thought, too. Yeah, not so much."
Suddenly the eyes were replaced with hundreds of dead bodies. They had all been tortured to death. Somehow, I knew that they all had powers like me. They didn’t stayed dead.
See what I mean? That’s a matter of editing. I am my own worst editor by the way. Many writers are. Try not to use things like "Ha" so much. Your narration is good, but a bit predictable. If you write an entire book in this same voice without expanding your horizons a bit, you will lose your readers.That said, I do like the voice. It’s easy to read and moves nicely. Try not to use short stubby sentences so much though. Sometimes you can combine a couple of them into the same thought. You want to change the cadence. That’s a matter of style and I’m sure you will develop that as you go.
Writing is easy sometimes. Sometimes not so much. You will hit some roadblocks some days and not be able to write a word. Don’t worry. Next day you might write a chapter. TRY to write something every day though. It takes a lot of balls to put your work out here for all the "experts" to pick apart. Ignore the people who put you down. Take what you can from constructive criticism, and don’t give up.
Good luck.
Toodeemo | Nov 18, 2009
